Thursday, 8 March 2012

Second Campaigner Challenge!!!

Marry to Kill
She was so beautiful. Her soft curls artistically piled up, decorated with white lilies. Her veil cast her face into a white hue, cascading down her elegant neck.
She smiled. Looking ahead, she stared deep into my eyes, demure but expectant. Desire burned in her eyes. A shiver of longing and bliss ran down my spine as I watched her glide down the aisle.
Finally, she is mine.
Her gloved hand reached for mine, and I held her hand, firm, and swore to myself never to let go.
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The ceremony was over. I went to fetch the car, for my bride. No, my wife.
As I start the ignition, I heard a soft click, and suddenly, a blinding light flared up. My vision went white.
All around me was in flames. All I could think was the pain. My skin seared with agony. Vaguely, I smelled burning flash.
Slowly, darkness engulfed me, and the last thing on my mind was my wife.
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Burn. Let him burn.
He was such a hypocrite.
Finally, I had my revenge. Sweet revenge.
Too bad I had to wear this wedding dress to watch the show.
But it’s worth it.
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Here are the rules:
Do one or more of the following:
  1. Write a pitch/logline for a book based on the prompts (less than 100 words)
  2. Write a short story/flash fiction piece of less than 200 words based on the prompts
  3. Write a poem with a twist using the prompts as inspiration (in less than 200 words)
  4. Write a story/poem in five sentences, each sentence based on one of the prompts
  5. Write a poem/flash fiction piece (in less than 200 words) about the water pear *without* using the words “pear”, “spoon”, or “droplet”.
For added difficulty/challenge:
  • Complete at least three of the above activities and tie them all together with a common theme (feel free to either state the theme in your post or leave us to guess what it might be)
  • Write in a genre that is not your own
  • Ask Challenge entrants to critique your writing. After the Challenge closes, you may wish to re-post your revised piece(s), and I’ll include a Linky List at the bottom of this post for those wishing more feedback on their revisions (note: revised entries will not be judged, so please label clearly your original post and your revisions. Please do not offer critique unless someone asks for it, as per the usual blogging conventions. If you do ask for critique, make sure you ask for it clearly so people know you want it, and please be prepared to receive feedback that may not be 100% glowing. If you are a critiquer, please be tactful and courteous, and remember to provide positives as well as negatives.)

Judging criteria

Judging will be based on:
  • How creatively the prompts are used (possible 5 points awarded)
  • How well the entries are written (possible 5 points awarded)
  • How engaging/entertaining/unique the entries are (possible 5 points awarded)
  • If the entrant completes more than one of the activities in their post, how well their pieces are tied together by a common theme and how strongly their theme shines through in their writing OR If the entrant only completes one of the activities in their post, how strongly their theme shines through in their writing (possible 5 points awarded)
  • Whether the judge wants to read more (possible 3 points awarded)
  • Creativeness/uniqueness of the entry’s title (possible 2 points awarded)
Challenge details

Once you’ve posted your Challenge post on your blog, pop back here and link directly to it in the Linky List below. Please make sure you include the direct URL link to your post, not just the link to your blog! Otherwise we won't be able to find your entry.

I've also set up the Linky List so you can "Like" entries, so make sure you come back here and vote for the People's Choice Awards!!! Like voting will remain open for the week after the Challenge ends, so you can take your time reading some/all of the entries and voting. As the like voting is not a popularity contest, it is only intended that people taking part in the actual Challenge should vote. So please don't go out and get your family/friends/other bloggers to vote for you. If you only have time to read/vote for a few entries, consider randomly selecting entries or starting at the end rather than at the beginning, so that the people at the end have their entries read and voted on as well.

Entries in the First Campaigner Challenge will close on Friday, March 9th (at 11.59pm EDT), so make sure you get your post in the Linky List before then. As usual, while everyone is very welcome to take part in this Challenge, only Campaigners will be eligible for prizes.

Thank you so much to all the Campaigners who have volunteered to judge one or more of the Challenges. I'm amazed by your generosity—you all rock!!! In terms of judging, Mark Koopmans will be in touch about that very soon. I'd love you all to take a moment to pop over and follow Mark, to say thanks for all his hard work in co-ordinating the judging.
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Special thanks to Rach, the judges, the sponsors for making this happen!!! This entry probably did not fit the requirements, and I'm expecting to be disqualified, but oh well, I posted this to have some fun. I didn't really used all the prompts, and adhere only to one rule, but I wanted this to be fun, and give readers something other to read, so think of this as an entertainment! Rather than a competing entry!
Hope you guys like this! Cheers!

p/s. please feel free to critique this piece! And enjoy it, along the way, of course! It is exactly 200 words (is that still abiding to the rule?!), and NOT written in my own genre! And "like" my entry too, if you like! Pssst...I'm entry 77...

41 comments:

  1. Oh my! That's a twist! Wish I knew what happened before! (#30)

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    1. Thanks! Hope you enjoy it! Can't wait to read yours!

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  2. Wow.. what a dark and twisted betrayal. I'm curious as to which prompt you did use, and what your normal genre are.

    Kevin, (#19)

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    1. Hi Kevin! Congrats!
      The prompts were a bit confusing to me, so I used it the way I could...with imagination!
      Make a guess!(As in what my genre is!)
      I'm real excited to read yours!

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  3. I loved the "mood" you created here... I definitely felt it. Dark, Heavy, Haunting. Nicely done ;) "like"

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    1. Hi Morgan! Nice to meet you! And thanks! =)

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  4. Congratulations! You have been shortlisted to move onto stage two.

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    1. WAIT?! I read this right?! Gee...thanks!
      :DDDDDDDDD

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  5. very creative - the story didn't give the info - but the pitch did - I liked it!
    I'm #48 by the way

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  6. Whoa, I didn't see that coming. Great twist. "The last thing on my mind was my wife"... so, I take it that means he doesn't suspect her? I'd love to know more!

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  7. Wasn't expecting that. Wow, I wouldn't want to get on her bad side. What did he do????

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    1. Haha...same here...Make a guess! XP

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  8. Ack! I so wasn't expecting that. Nice job! :D

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    1. Thanks! Yup...it was unexpected for me too...

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  9. Wow, I did not expect her to be the villain! Though he did sound a bit possessive.

    #38

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    1. Hhmmm...agreed. And thanks for stopping by! Oh, and love yours!

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  10. That was shocking. I thought he was possessive and would be the one to do harm to her. I could not figure out what prompt/s you used.


    Two grammar suggestions:
    "...I watched her glided down the aisle." - should be glide down the aisle.
    "I smelt burning flash." - I think you meant smelled burning flesh.

    I enjoyed the story!
    Richard Alan

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    1. Oh, thanks! You're right! I'm a disaster around grammar! Thanks for pointing them out! Will correct them as soon as I can! Glad that you enjoyed the story...I think it's the final prompt that I used...it didn't made sense, right?! Oh dear...

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  11. Whoa! I think you topped my twist on the first chalenge. LOL Nice entry. ; )
    Melissa Maygrove #14

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    1. Really? I thought your twist is a shocking one!!! Couldn't wait to read yours!

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  12. Oh! What a witch! That was a great twist! Enjoyed it immensely!

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  13. I made sure to have someone watch our getaway car on our wedding day. Not a fan of rice, popcorn, or explosions tucked away in there. Nice one! :)

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  14. Wow. Usually I can side with one or another character in these flash fiction entries, but in this case I have no idea. I love your story and poem for that reason! Great writing, too. :)

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    1. Thanks!Ummm...I don't think I wrote a poem for this challenge...;P But, I'm so happy!!! To get a thumbs up from an awesome writer like you!

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  15. That was definitely the most interesting flash fic I've read for this challenge.

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  16. I liked the pictures and the atmosphere you created in my head. The twist was mean, but I somehow got the feeling that the groom deserved his end.

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    1. Haha! Thanks! You're the first one to agree...

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  17. Nice succinctness to the prose and getting from one point to the other but building on the emotion that resurfaces in the end,.

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    1. Thanks. Will keep in mind your words.

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  18. I liked this. I want to know what he did to deserve it. Nicely done.

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  19. Really enjoyed this, the final twist and the bride's words said so much, wonder what he did to meet this end? Very well written.

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    1. Thanks! And you're not the only one...

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  20. i love stories like this. now where's the prequel? ;)

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